Craft Notes
Unhumorous Punchlines
The MotherThe girl wrote a story. “But how much better it would be if you wrote a novel,” said her mother. The girl built a doll-house. “But how much better if it were a real house,” her mother said. The made a small pillow for her father. “But wouldn’t a quilt be more practical,” said her mother. The girl dug a small hole in the garden. “But how much better if you dug a large hole,” said her mother. The girl dug a large hole and went to sleep in it. “But how much better if you slept forever,” said her mother.
“The Mother,” a short piece from Lydia Davis’s Break it Down, perfectly demonstrates, for me, the unhumorous punchline where the last line and components leading up to it operate as a joke, but aren’t funny. Punchlines at their best are oblique and unexpected; it’s the minor epiphany of “getting it” that makes them so visceral – keyword here, because what begins in the brain ends in the gut.
Or, from Norman Lock’s Grim Tales:
When he was struck down by his wife’s lover, the scythe moaned in the wheat. In the kitchen, cutting open a loaf, she dropped her knife as the blood spilled out the bread’s fresh wounds.
These actually remind me of haikus; not so much formally, but the mental architecture of their agenda — like the build up and the blast. Oh, and speaking of haiku, I’ll leave you with one of my faves, by Basho:
My eyes following
until the bird lost at sea
found a small island
I love how we follow the horizon of each line down to the semiotic island of “island.” It’s like our eyes are the bird. I’m not laughing, and that’s just fine.
Tags: Basho, Lydia Davis, norman lock







