November 6th, 2009 / 11:50 am
 Vicarious MFA

Is this a good poem?

processLast night in class we did some process writing. I don’t like process writing, especially when it’s rule-based. I always wonder more if I’m paying attention to the rules. Last night in class I kind of ignored the rules and the process writing. I wrote this poem. Is it any good? Is poetry better with revision? Actually, don’t answer that. Just tell me if you think this poem is good.  

 
  
 

 

 

Take a dog
Give it to some girl
Really give it to her
Give some girl the leaking dog

Take a girl
Take that girl and shove her
Put on the dog a little
Give her to the dog

Take a gift
Go to Florida
Get two collies
Take them at night

 

 

 

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40 Comments

  1. November 6th, 2009 / 3:56 pm daniel bailey—

      this poem is perfect. don’t revise it.

  2. November 6th, 2009 / 11:56 am daniel bailey—

      this poem is perfect. don’t revise it.

  3. November 6th, 2009 / 4:22 pm Joseph Young—

      yes.

  4. November 6th, 2009 / 12:22 pm Joseph Young—

      yes.

  5. November 6th, 2009 / 4:26 pm Amy McDaniel—

      Adam, i love this. i love its soft allusiveness and its sestinatude. i like your graphic too.

  6. November 6th, 2009 / 12:26 pm Amy McDaniel—

      Adam, i love this. i love its soft allusiveness and its sestinatude. i like your graphic too.

  7. November 6th, 2009 / 4:27 pm alec niedenthal—

      wow, that’s fantastic.

  8. November 6th, 2009 / 12:27 pm alec niedenthal—

      wow, that’s fantastic.

  9. November 6th, 2009 / 4:30 pm Sarah—

      I love the end.

  10. November 6th, 2009 / 12:30 pm Sarah—

      I love the end.

  11. November 6th, 2009 / 4:38 pm Adam Robinson—

      Oh shoot, I just realized I meant to post this at Fictionaut.

  12. November 6th, 2009 / 12:38 pm Adam Robinson—

      Oh shoot, I just realized I meant to post this at Fictionaut.

  13. November 6th, 2009 / 4:46 pm Nate—

      nice.

  14. November 6th, 2009 / 12:46 pm Nate—

      nice.

  15. November 6th, 2009 / 5:46 pm ce.—

      yeah. i don’t know, dude. i like its hows, but i’m not completely finding its whys. i’m not sure what i mean by that. i might be drunk.

  16. November 6th, 2009 / 1:46 pm ce.—

      yeah. i don’t know, dude. i like its hows, but i’m not completely finding its whys. i’m not sure what i mean by that. i might be drunk.

  17. November 6th, 2009 / 6:10 pm audri—

      don’t change a thing. burn the rules.

  18. November 6th, 2009 / 2:10 pm audri—

      don’t change a thing. burn the rules.

  19. November 6th, 2009 / 6:14 pm drew kalbach—

      the poem is good but why is this a post?

  20. November 6th, 2009 / 2:14 pm drew kalbach—

      the poem is good but why is this a post?

  21. November 6th, 2009 / 6:17 pm Mather Schneider—

      What rules does this poem break?

      I don’t like poems that tell me what to do.

  22. November 6th, 2009 / 6:17 pm thomas p levy—

      because he didn’t mean to post it here

  23. November 6th, 2009 / 2:17 pm Mather Schneider—

      What rules does this poem break?

      I don’t like poems that tell me what to do.

  24. November 6th, 2009 / 2:17 pm thomas p levy—

      because he didn’t mean to post it here

  25. November 6th, 2009 / 6:21 pm Blake Butler—

      i heard you loved getting told what to do

  26. November 6th, 2009 / 2:21 pm Blake Butler—

      i heard you loved getting told what to do

  27. November 6th, 2009 / 6:24 pm Mather Schneider—

      Check your ears.

  28. November 6th, 2009 / 2:24 pm Mather Schneider—

      Check your ears.

  29. November 6th, 2009 / 10:10 pm Sean—

      “good”?

      I’d like to see a revision. I mean there is some friction, but I’d like to see more, a crackle or rub. But I guess people above thought it was “good,” so OK.

      It would be sad to abandon a poem that way, though.

  30. November 6th, 2009 / 6:10 pm Sean—

      “good”?

      I’d like to see a revision. I mean there is some friction, but I’d like to see more, a crackle or rub. But I guess people above thought it was “good,” so OK.

      It would be sad to abandon a poem that way, though.

  31. November 6th, 2009 / 10:14 pm Ryan Call—

      i think the image you put iwth the post is good.

  32. November 6th, 2009 / 6:14 pm Ryan Call—

      i think the image you put iwth the post is good.

  33. November 6th, 2009 / 11:21 pm dave e—

      you’re thinking of Cotton

  34. November 6th, 2009 / 7:21 pm dave e—

      you’re thinking of Cotton

  35. November 6th, 2009 / 11:22 pm dave e—

      i stop all stories at mediocre.

      hmm, stopping at good might be something to stew on. either that or it’s some mad dog and running in the wet grass

  36. November 6th, 2009 / 7:22 pm dave e—

      i stop all stories at mediocre.

      hmm, stopping at good might be something to stew on. either that or it’s some mad dog and running in the wet grass

  37. November 6th, 2009 / 11:23 pm dave e—

      can i still slap your back on htmlgiant?

      i love to slap writers’ backs, especially dudes

  38. November 6th, 2009 / 7:23 pm dave e—

      can i still slap your back on htmlgiant?

      i love to slap writers’ backs, especially dudes

  39. November 8th, 2009 / 1:05 pm Matt Jasper—

      My favorite line is “Give some girl the leaking dog” because I can’t tell whether the dog is urinating or has just been hit by a car. Though there could be more lines (about a mall and pallbearers) at the end, it is brillig as it is.

  40. November 8th, 2009 / 9:05 am Matt Jasper—

      My favorite line is “Give some girl the leaking dog” because I can’t tell whether the dog is urinating or has just been hit by a car. Though there could be more lines (about a mall and pallbearers) at the end, it is brillig as it is.